sowell ([info]sowell) wrote,
@ 2008-09-22 21:29:00
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Entry tags:fanfic, house falls down, narusasu, naruto: fic

More NaruSasu squee. Well, angsty squee.
Title: When the house falls down (1/?)
Author: [info]sowell 
Rating: R, for language; not sure yet if I'll be going to the NC-17 place
Warnings: Teenage ninja swear a lot. Also, spoilers up through the latest issue of the manga.
Genre: Action, adventure, friendship, romance, aaaaaaaaaaaangst
Wordcount: 3,543
Summary: When the house falls down, all that's left is to rebuild. Naruto/Sasuke friendship with subtext-y goodness.
Disclaimer: They belong to Kishimoto-san. I apologize for my extreme western-izing of them.
Author's Note: 1) Here's my attempt to re-direct Sasuke from his current course in canon. In case he actually DOES go to Konoha and start slaughtering innocent people, I'm going to need my own little world where he....doesn't do that. Voila. 2) This is going to be a new sort of format for me - 3 parts, each divided into 4-5 chapters. Don't ask me why, it just came together that way. 3) This is maybe...not the most sympathetic portrayal of Sasuke ever? He's sort of pissing me off in the manga at the moment. But Naruto still loves him, which is good enough for me. 4) This is so un-beta'd it isn't even funny

 
PART I: Capture

Chapter 1; in which Team Kakashi captures Sasuke and attempts to love-bomb him into submission

Sasuke only takes his eyes off of his opponent for a second – just a second to check Karin’s status. It’s a second too long.

It’s not his attacker who does him in. The ninja he’s fighting is nothing special. Sasuke had sensed them tailing Hawk nearly an hour before their team attacked. Most likely bounty hunters, smart enough to recognize the dark Akatsuki robes, but not smart enough to run.

No. He’d been able to fight the ninja without even using his Sharingan, half his mind focused on watching his team. The attack that does him in comes from somewhere else. He hears the whistling of the kunai before he sees it, hurtling toward him from the upper right. Only it doesn’t hit him. It hits his opponent directly between the eyes, spraying blood over both of them. Sasuke whips around, Sharingan instantly at the ready, but it’s too late. A flash of orange and a sharp prick to the back of his neck coincide with the ground exploding under him. He springs away, eyes probing for his teammates, but thick clouds of dust are rising from the broken ground, curling around the toppled trees and the boulders rolling like marbles. He can’t see two feet in front of him.

And whatever drug they shot him with is beginning to take effect. Everything darkens as the corners of his vision go blurry. He stumbles, but he doesn’t fall. The collar of his robe twists against the back of his neck, and he’s hauled up like a rag doll. Far away, he can hear Karin calling his name.

“I got him,” a familiar voice shouts, triumphant.

Damn it, Naruto… he thinks weakly, and then everything goes black.

*

Sasuke dreams. Voices drift in and out of his conscious mind, conjuring up images from the past. He dreams that he’s back in Konoha, and Itachi is alive. He’s on his big brother’s shoulders, and he gazes up at the tree branches moving sedately past them. He can see the village in the distance, the four great heads carved into the mountain, watching. Protecting.

The rock that Itachi sets him down on is large enough for them to talk face to face, despite the height difference. There’s a small smile on Itachi’s lips, but his eyes are grave. Somewhere in the back of his mind, Sasuke knows that this is wrong. He’s seen this expression on his brother’s face before, and it wasn’t here in the forest. There’s something all too familiar about this. Familiar and horrifying.

As a hurdle you must overcome, I’ll always be there for you. Even if you hate me.

Sasuke hears the words as clear as day, even though Itachi’s mouth doesn’t move. His big brother just looks at him with that gentle smile. Sasuke searches his brother’s expression until his eyes begin to water, making the familiar face shimmer and blur in front of him.

That’s what being a brother is.

Sasuke jerks as blood starts to leak from Itachi’s eyes and mouth. He tries to scramble back, but he’s paralyzed by the gruesome contrast of Itachi’s kind expression and the blood rushing down his cheeks. He can only stare in horror as Itachi’s face transforms slowly into Naruto’s, red eyes swirling into blue, black hair turning to blood-matted blonde.

Suddenly, everything is on fire. Flames lick up every tree trunk, bathing the forest floor in an eerie red glow. Naruto is on the ground, his body and Itachi’s laying side by side with dead, staring eyes. More bodies litter the landscape, some on fire, some missing limbs, all dead. Everything is burning in an endless circle around him, and his sword is dripping with blood. He’s covered in it. The world is on fire, and somehow Sasuke knows it’s his doing.

He tries to remember why he’s here, but all he can recall is fire and pain. Aside from that, his memory is blank. The flames are closing in, eating away at the ground, tugging at his clothes. There’s no escape, and he’ll burn like everything else.

He falls to his knees and screams.

*

The first thing Sasuke sees when he opens his eyes is soft pink hair drifting against pale skin. Sakura’s blurry figure looms over him, two fingers against his carotid artery.

“You’re awake,” she comments with a quick smile. “I’m glad.” She doesn’t halt whatever she’s doing, presumably checking his pulse. His head is still fuzzy, but it only takes him a moment to realize his arms and legs are firmly bound. He feels unaccountably weak.

“The drug is suppressing your chakra.” Sakura answers his unspoken question without looking in his direction. “It’s Tsunade-sama’s special concoction. We figured the ropes alone wouldn’t be enough.”

She’s frustratingly close; it would be easy break free and knock her out if he didn’t feel so damn woozy. As it is, he has to content himself by leveling a stare at her. His Sharingan doesn’t take much chakra at all anymore. A few seconds of eye contact and it will all be over.

Except she doesn’t look him in the eye. Interesting. She’s learned something in the last three years, then.
“Whatever you’re doing,” he says, “It’s pointless. I’m not going back to the village. Naruto is stupider than I thought if he hasn’t gotten that through his head by now.”

She sits back. “Why was your team headed in that direction, then?”

He doesn’t answer. As much as he wants to spill his hatred of Konoha out on Sakura, it would be pointless. Unlike his former teammates, he’s learned to keep his mouth shut.

Sakura smiles again. She’s grown, he notes dispassionately. Back at Orochimaru’s compound he was so focused on Naruto that he’d barely noticed. She’ll never be a beauty, but she’s not the gawky girl he left behind. Her eyes are still warm, but there’s a tempered wariness to them that she never showed around him before.

“We’ve been following you for days,” she tells him. “Naruto wanted to try and take you right away, but Kakashi made us shield ourselves behind those bounty hunters. It was a good plan.”

Kakashi. Sasuke wonders if he’ll get to see his old sensei before he escapes. Maybe even fight him. And Naruto. Naruto should be right next to Sakura in this dim little room, yelling at Sasuke about friendship and bonds and Home Sweet Konoha. But as far as Sasuke can see, the idiot is nowhere to be found.

Sakura rises gracefully to her feet, leaving Sasuke staring at her knees. Her shins are covered with cuts and bruises of every shape and size.

“Is that it?” he can’t help but taunt. “No other words for your first love?” Her composure is throwing him out of balance. He’s frustrated that he was caught, frustrated by his helplessness, and, most of all, frustrated that he’s sitting here, having a conversation with one of the very people he should be killing.

Her hair hides her eyes as she tips her head forward, but he sees the blush rise in her cheeks. “You’ve gotten so strong, Sasuke-kun,” she says softly. “We never would have captured you if you weren’t already distracted. We all know that. Even Naruto.”

Sasuke eyes her warily as she lays a hand on his cheek. “Even though you don’t want to be here,” she whispers, “I’m glad to see you.” Her fingers slide down his face to find the pressure point on his neck. “Now sleep a little longer.”

She presses lightly, and he loses consciousness again.

*

The next time Sasuke comes to, he’s alone. Or at least, that’s what he thinks. He shifts his shoulders a bit, trying to find the faulty points in his bindings. Predictably, there are none. He’s still weak, but his head’s a little clearer. If he concentrates hard enough, he should be able to –

“Please don’t.”

Another, more recently familiar, voice comes at him from the far corner of the room. Coal black eyes stare at him out of a blank, pale face. The new one. Sai. His replacement. So they’re taking turns guarding him, then.

He merely looks at Sai from across the room, not bothering to hide his disdain. If Konoha thought this newest member of Kakashi’s squad would be strong enough to stop him, they were sorely mistaken. He ignores Sai’s unblinking stare, blocking out his surroundings. Just enough chakra for a few moments of Chidori. Once the ropes were burned off, he could escape using speed alone. He bows his head, concentrating.

“Please,” Sai says again, polite and impersonal. “You’re still very weak, but if you try to escape I might have to hurt you. I’d rather Naruto-kun not become angry with me.”

“Scared of Naruto,” Sasuke sneers. “Pathetic.”

Sai smiles the way he smiled when Sasuke first laid eyes on him, mouth tipping up in an expression as sweet as it is empty.

“I owe a lot to Naruto-kun,” Sai says. “He is…my friend. But he’s your friend as well, and I think if I hurt you, Naruto wouldn’t like it.” He pauses for a moment, tipping his head to the side. “Although, it would be smarter to kill you. Naruto-kun and Sakura-san trust you too much.”

Sasuke feels his own beast rise up in him eagerly. He smiles, feral. “Go ahead.”

Sai seems to be seriously considering it. He stands, drawing his sword. Sasuke wills him to come closer, to actually make an attempt. If he can engage him in battle, if he can just get his hands on that weapon…

“Sai!” Naruto barks from the doorway. “What the hell do you think you’re doing?” Sasuke looks up, meeting Naruto’s eyes for a brief, charged moment. Naruto looks away first.

Sai stops, mid-step, and turns to Naruto. The two of them stare at each other from across the room, communication passing silently between them. It was odd how Naruto was always able to manage that. Of course, the real problem with Naruto wasn’t getting him to communicate – it was getting him to shut the hell up.

The two teammates seem to come to a consensus, and Sai relaxes, sliding back down the wall to resume his position in the corner. Naruto stands over him impatiently.

“It’s my turn,” he says. “I’ll take over.”

“No,” Sai answers calmly.

Naruto frowns. “What?”

“No,” Sai repeats. “Kakashi-sensei told me not to leave you alone with Sasuke-kun. I’ll stay.”

“What?” Naruto says, outraged. “He doesn’t trust me?”

“Your teammate tried to kill you last time you met,” Sai says, unmoved in the face of Naruto’s indignation. “It’s for your safety.”

“I don’t need your protection,” Naruto yells, incensed.

“Naruto.” Sakura’s silhouette appears in the doorway. “I hate to agree with Sai, but I think Kakashi is right,” she says worriedly. “You - ”

Now. Sasuke’s Chidori flares to life, incinerating his bindings before anyone can blink. The ropes crumble to dust around him as he leaps to his feet. He sees Naruto’s eyes widen an instant before Sasuke kicks him into the wall. Naruto slides down, unconscious.

Sai rushes him. Sasuke turns the Sharingan on him, catching his attack and flinging him back. He manages to get a hand on Sai’s sword in the process. Sai lands firmly on his feet, but Sasuke throws the sword after him, spearing him through the shoulder with his own weapon. Sasuke sees Sai sink to his knees before he turns to the exit.

What the fuck did they inject him with? Sasuke can almost feel his energy ebbing. Five seconds of fighting and he’s without chakra, without speed, and without weapon. He stumbles toward Sakura’s frozen figure, trying to shake the cobwebs from his vision.

There’s a look of set determination on her face. “I’m sorry,” he hears her say in a low voice, just before a hurricane crashes into the side of his face. The blow lifts him off his feet and slams him against the far wall. He feels the concrete crack against his spine, tastes the skin split inside his mouth. He crumples face first to the hard-packed floor, coughing blood.

 “Sasuke!”

Gentle hands roll him onto his back, and then Sakura is looming over him anxiously. He tries to focus his eyes on her, gasping through his crushed ribs.

“I’m sorry,” she repeats, and he hazily notes that there are tears in her eyes. “Stupid,” she says angrily. “Why did you do that?”

“Fuck,” he hears Naruto moan from off to the side, and then he blacks out again.

*

The third time Sasuke wakes, he’s staring directly into bright blue eyes.

Naruto’s face is inches from his own, and his eyebrows are scrunched into a glare. Without preface, he reaches up and flicks Sasuke in the forehead. Hard.

“You knocked out two of my teeth, asshole,” Naruto growls.

“You should know better than to let your guard down like that,” Sasuke says coolly. “Did they forget to teach you even that in Konoha?” Naruto’s scrowl deepens.

He’s tied up again, tight enough to cut off his circulation. He doesn’t make the mistake of trying the Chidori a second time. Whatever they’re keeping him doped up with, it’s potent enough to sap nearly all his strength. He’ll simply have to find another way to escape.

He figures he’s been a prisoner for at least twelve hours. Enough time for Hawk to track him and formulate a plan. That was, if Suigetsu and Karin hadn’t killed each other by now. Or if Suigetsu hadn’t decamped altogether.

Kakashi is lounging in the far corner of the room, conspicuously ignoring them. He has a typically florid novel in his hand, seemingly engrossed. For a split second, Sasuke feels like he’s twelve again. Like maybe if he keeps arguing long enough with Naruto, Kakashi might come over and separate them, or give them some lame mission as punishment.

He shakes off the déjà vu. His days with Team 7 are so far away that they might as well have never happened at all. In any case, it has no impact on the person he is now.

When he chances another glance, Naruto’s eyes have taken on a sly cast. The blonde looms even closer, putting his face right next to Sasuke’s. “You’re not in such great shape either, baka.”

He pokes a finger in the vicinity of Sasuke’s jaw, and Sasuke winces. For the first time, he realizes he’s aching all over. He can feel the medical tape circling his ribs underneath the ropes, and the entire right side of his face is throbbing lightly.

Naruto regards him smugly. “Sakura-chan took care of you in one punch. Pretty cool, huh?”

Sasuke keeps his expression carefully blank, but his brain stutters. Sakura did this to him? He recalls the incredible force behind her blow, mind whirling. So she’s not just a medic, then. He’d have to be more cautious.

“Anyway,” Naruto says, settling back with a contented sigh. “We got you. You won’t get away again.”

Sasuke watches Naruto through narrowed eyes for a few moments. He looks far too pleased with himself. “Now what?” he says eventually. “You bring me back to Konoha and turn me over to the Hokage?”

Naruto shrugs. “That’s the idea. They’ll probably want to put you in ANBU custody, but I can convince Granny Tsunade to go easy on you. It’s not like you’re Konoha’s enemy or anything.”

Sasuke grits his teeth and says nothing.

“Besides,” Naruto is staring at him quizzically now. “There’s no more reason for you to stay away.” He smiles a little wistfully. “I heard that Itachi is dead. That means you’re free, right?”

Free, Sasuke thinks emptily. He wouldn’t be free until every ninja in Konoha suffered they way Itachi had. His eyes fall shut for a moment, replaying the ghostly pressure of Itachi’s fingers against his forehead. Sorry Sasuke, this is the last time. He can almost feel Itachi’s blood slipping across his skin.

His throat feels as dry as dust. “I won’t stay,” he says. “I cut my ties with Konoha a long time ago.”

Naruto’s face has always been pitiably transparent. Sasuke can see his frustration now, turning the ninja’s eyes stormy. “Where else are you going to go, huh? What are you going to do – keep running missions for those Akatsuki pieces of shit? They’re murderers and traitors and I don’t believe you’ve turned into one!”

“You never had a clue about me,” Sasuke says icily. “Don’t pretend to know me now. Whatever path I choose is none of your business.”

“Fuck you,” Naruto says, low and murderous. “I knew you better than Orochimaru ever did. That’s why I won’t give up. I know the old Sasuke is still in there.”

Stupid, stubborn Naruto. It would almost be amusing if it wasn’t so annoying. “You still don’t get it, do you?” Sasuke says sharply. “There’s nothing here to salvage. We’re not friends, and we never were. Not the way you seem to think.”

Naruto’s on his feet now, fists clenched. “That’s not true,” he yells. “You may have cut your ties, but I never stopped thinking of you as a friend.”

“Useless,” Sasuke mutters, turning his face away.

“Hey!” Naruto gives his foot an angry kick. “Don’t you dare dismiss me when I’m talking to you. I’m not finished. Ow!”

He grabs his head, then glares up Kakashi. Sasuke had forgotten how quickly his old sensei could move. Kakashi knocks Naruto across the back of the head again, then gives him a perfunctory shove toward the door.

“Enough,” he says.

“But – ”

“No more for tonight.” Kakashi’s voice is firm. “Go help Sakura with the med kit.”

Naruto’s mouth tightens in displeasure, but he does as he’s told.

Sasuke watches him go. He realizes he’s clenching his jaw and slowly, deliberately, relaxes it. He wills his composure back into place, feeling Kakashi’s eyes on him. Naruto was a child – that was all. Stupid, reckless, naïve. He could argue until he was blue in the face and he’d never change Sasuke’s mind.

Sometimes it was hard to remember, though, when Naruto was being so…Naruto. So loud and orange and there. He’d done a good job of blocking out the memories over the last three years, but every once in a while, they snuck through. Now he realizes that the memories couldn’t quite compare to the sheer energy of Naruto in the flesh. Five minutes of arguing, and Sasuke already feels worn out.

“We’ll rest here for a few more days,” Kakashi says, and Sasuke jerks out of his reverie. His old sensei is still looking at the door where Naruto exited, but there’s no doubt who he’s addressing. Sasuke wonders what it is about Kakashi that reduces him to a schoolboy. He feels like that now, scowling at the ground like he’s a student in detention instead of a hostage in a life-or-death situation.

“Naruto and Sakura have been chasing you for a long time,” Kakashi continues. “They need to recuperate before they head back.”

He finally turns to Sasuke and looks down at him out of one dark eye, inscrutable as ever. “They think, because they captured you, that the hard part is over. I’d like to let them celebrate a bit before – well.”

Something flares in Sasuke. Kakashi knows, then, what Naruto can’t see; he understands that Sasuke’s made his decision. He’ll never come back. Not the way Naruto wants. Sasuke should feel relieved, but he feels oddly uneasy instead.

“Sakura and Naruto would never be able to take your life.” Kakashi’s voice is casual, friendly. “Their devotion is absolute.”

“But yours isn’t?” Sasuke guesses coolly.

“For their sake,” Kakashi says, “I hope it doesn’t come to that.”

Sasuke smiles grimly. “I think you’ll find I’m much harder to kill than before, Kakashi-sensei.”

Kakashi’s expression doesn’t change, but the tension in the room slowly sharpens to a razor’s point. In spite of himself, Sasuke feels the hairs rise on the back of his neck. As often as he’s observed Kakashi in battle, he’s never had that steely expression turned on him before.

Then, without warning, Kakashi’s visible eye crinkles into a smile. “True enough,” he chuckles. “You’re not exactly the rookie I trained three years ago, are you?”

Sasuke watches through narrowed eyes as Kakashi returns to his corner and picks up his book.

This is nothing, Sasuke tells himself. This is just one more obstacle along the path to revenge. He overcame Orochimaru, he can overcome this as well. Kakashi’s team is an enemy like anyone else.

But for some reason Sasuke can’t stop remembering Naruto at the Valley of the End

“What the hell are you?” he’d asked, watching the chakra swirl up menacingly.


“A friend!” Naruto’s voice had been choked with tears. His shirt had still been ripped from where Sasuke put a fist through his chest.“That’s why I won’t give you up to Orochimaru.”


Sasuke closes his eyes. Naruto had failed then, and he’d fail this time, too. And Sasuke can’t figure out why that doesn’t make him feel any better.
Chapter 2


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[info]starfreckled
2008-09-23 03:21 am UTC (link)
Ooh, I like this! It's rare to come across fic like this. I'll definitely keep up! You say it's not the most sympathetic portrayal of Sasuke, but...this is kind of exactly how he is at the moment. XD You've got him pinned!

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[info]sowell
2008-09-23 11:19 am UTC (link)
Heh, thanks! Yeah, he's a little off his rocker at the moment, no?

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[info]eli_artemisia
2008-09-23 03:25 am UTC (link)
WOW!!! Oh man, this is really refreshing after rummaging through all the bad fic on ffn.

This is maybe...not the most sympathetic portrayal of Sasuke ever? He's sort of pissing me off in the manga at the moment.

Haha, well, I like the way you write Sasuke. I really feel for Naruto just wanting to beat some sense into the guy. He's just so damn frustrating that way, and it was pretty intense how Kakashi essentially tells Sasuke that he will kill him if it means protecting Naruto, Sakura, and Konoha.

I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take this story! I hope Team 7 gets through to Sasuke. That boy is so messed up. Argh!

Much Love,
Marysia

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[info]sowell
2008-09-23 11:22 am UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback. I like writing Sasuke because he's so angsty and complicated, but sometimes I, like Naruto, want to kick his ass.

it was pretty intense how Kakashi essentially tells Sasuke that he will kill him if it means protecting Naruto, Sakura, and Konoha.

I adore Kakashi, and I love how he always does what needs to be done, even if he ends up hurting himself in the process.

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[info]istne_pieklo
2008-09-23 06:31 am UTC (link)
Wow! This is certainly a brilliant start to a hopefully brilliant story! The characters are absolutely vivid and IC and I love it how all of the members of Team Kakashi have their moments with Sasuke. It's so heartbreaking and so realistic at the same time. Looking forward to the next part! ^_^
Btw, I love the title!

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[info]sowell
2008-09-23 11:24 am UTC (link)
Thanks! I miss the days when Team 7 interacted all the time. As much as I like seeing Naruto and Sasuke battle it out, I wouldn't mind seeing them fight TOGETHER again a few times before the story comes to a close.

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[info]chouxi
2008-09-23 06:40 am UTC (link)
Give you props for writing a fic that actually takes place from the manga-verse, where Sasuke is deranged and wants to murder all of Konoha! But I actually like Sasuke going evil, so if he's turning good in this story, mou... Darn, why did team 7 have to butt in and ruin the fun?

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[info]sowell
2008-09-23 11:25 am UTC (link)
Thanks! My goal is to sort of reform him by the end, but it will definitely be a while. I'd say you've got a good ten chapters or so of evil Sasuke before he has any change of heart. Enjoy!

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[info]snarkwithasmile
2008-09-24 02:34 am UTC (link)
Sasuke's kinda pissing me off in the manga at the moment, too. And by kinda I mean I wish I could punch him in the face - so you can probably guess that that thirty second section where Sakura beats the crap out of him in one blow was my favorite part of this. It was just so satisfying. xD

I really like this a lot. All of the characterizations are spot in the best ways - Sakura's much stronger, but Sasuke can still make her blush. And Sai's learning emotions, but he's still got his calculating way of dealing with social situations - and of course Sasuke disdains him out of principle. Oh man, though, Kakashi was hooot awesome in this, as he should always be. That tense moment before he does his eye crinkle smile is absolutely perfect and gives me shivers.

All the events in this chapter unfold in just the right order, and ... hm, what's the word. I guess the over all background tone gives me just the right feeling as I'm reading. Haha, my feedback: not so well-worded! In conclusion, I'll be really excited to see where this is going.

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[info]sowell
2008-09-24 06:57 pm UTC (link)
that thirty second section where Sakura beats the crap out of him in one blow was my favorite part of this

Tell me about it. I'll feel seriously cheated if we don't get to see super!Sakura punch Sasuke at least once in canon.

Oh man, though, Kakashi was hooot awesome in this, as he should always be.

Yay! I love Kakashi. Sasuke will never out-badass him, as far as I'm concerned.

Thanks for the feedback!

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[info]rabid_fangrrl
2008-09-25 05:25 pm UTC (link)
This is really well written. Poor Naruto! All I can think about is, what'll he do about his missing teeth? Get a bridge? E!

Looking forward to more1 <3

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[info]sowell
2008-09-28 10:55 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

All I can think about is, what'll he do about his missing teeth?

Haha, Sakura grew them back with her medic-fu!

New chapter will be up tonight.

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[info]rabid_fangrrl
2008-09-28 11:34 pm UTC (link)
::squeal!::

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[info]pippins_nose
2008-09-28 01:37 am UTC (link)
I loved it! It's the best fic I've read recently that fits in with all this... recent stuff. I look forward to moar, plz :)

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[info]sowell
2008-09-28 10:59 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! More up tonight.

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[info]dlvr
2008-09-29 01:03 pm UTC (link)
Unlike everyone else, (apparently) i'm not upset with the way
Sasuke is acting in the manga right now, but I still loved the interaction between Sakura and Sasuke and especially the way she got to show him how much she's grown in the last three years. I can really see this happening in cannon, Sakura apologizing, but still hitting him with everything she's got.

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[info]sowell
2008-09-29 06:43 pm UTC (link)
Unlike everyone else, (apparently) i'm not upset with the way Sasuke is acting in the manga right now

For me, it depends on which way it goes. I...don't think it makes a lot of sense that he wants to kill EVERYONE in Konoha, when most of them have no knowledge of what went on with Itachi. Plus, it seems like he just remembered how much his old team meant to him during the battle with the eight-tails...I don't know. I'll have to see how it goes. For me, this fic is a fail-safe in case it ends really, really badly for Sasuke and Naruto. I'll need to be able to retreat into my own little fictional world in that case.

Wow, I just wrote a lot. ANYWAY, thanks for the feedback. Writing Sasuke is difficult, since he's so outwardly stoic, but I'm having fun.

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[info]dlvr
2008-09-30 07:25 am UTC (link)
I can't see the manga ending badly for Sasuke and Naruto, but if it does, i'll retreat into your fictional world as well.

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[info]questofdreams
2008-09-30 04:14 pm UTC (link)
askeislskd hoooly crap. This is... EXCELLENT. Your characterization is amazingly spot on--every exchange Sasuke had with each member of Team 7 was believable and rang true to their canon counterparts. This is so well written and so intriguing and I'd do back flips if I could XDD to express my enthusiasm. Thank you so much for writing!!! <3

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[info]sowell
2008-09-30 06:56 pm UTC (link)
Ooh, more feedback, yay! I'm so glad you're enjoying it!

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[info]hsbs
2008-11-16 06:22 pm UTC (link)
this is totally believable, the characters are completely IC, and this is exactly how I think Sasuke (the PIA that he is) would actually behave and think at the current stage of the manga.

I cant wait to read more...

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[info]sowell
2008-11-16 09:49 pm UTC (link)
Thanks, I'm glad you like it! There are 10 chapters up so far, so happy reading!

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[info]cheydancer
2008-11-16 11:30 pm UTC (link)
I've just recently started watching Naruto, and am not far in the manga, I have to admit I'm a little disturbed by the implications of what will be happening in the future of my reading and viewing since I really, really like the current relationships between the various characters (main and side).

That being said, from what little I know of both, and from what I have watched, not only is this story well-written but very much in character. I enjoyed the set-up and the introduction of each of the characters I am currently familiar with, I also enjoyed the look into Sai's character and am looking forward to meeting him in canon.

Sakura-chan's actions were fabulous. I liked the compassion and tenderness she showed in tending Sasuke and I loved her ability to take him out. She certainly has grown and is very well presented in this fic.

I eagerly look forward to reading each currently published chapter.

Thank-you very much for sharing this.

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[info]sowell
2008-11-17 11:51 am UTC (link)
Yes, without spoiling you too much...things change. And Sai is GREAT.

Glad you liked the beginning (and Sakura!) and I hope you like the rest of it, too!

Thanks for the feedback!

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[info]oohyaoi
2009-02-08 10:28 pm UTC (link)
gahh!!! this is so good and it's only the first chapter! I was feening (yes, literally feening like an addict) for some good, plotty canon-verse naruto fics, and someone pointed me this way. This is exactly what I've been looking for, and I can't wait to read more! Everyone is so OC (esp Sasuke who I think is really hard to write) and I love that this ties in closely with the recent manga. Mind if I friend you?

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[info]dotmoon
2009-02-18 02:03 am UTC (link)
I apologize for the spammy comment, but I haven't been able to find another way to get a message to you.

This story, "When the house falls down," has been nominated and seconded in the Naruto category of the 2008 dotmoon.net UFO Awards. Congratulations! The UFO (Universal Fanfic Open) Awards are aimed at recognizing quality fanfiction across all the various fandoms on the internet. As a nominee, your fanfic is eligible to compete for best story of the Naruto category. Category winners will go on to compete for the title of best fanfic written in 2008! You can read more about the UFO Awards at http://www.dotmoon.net/awards/.

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[info]sowell
2009-02-18 09:35 pm UTC (link)
Awesome! I totally want to participate. So...yes. Permission given. Thanks!

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[info]dotmoon
2009-02-26 09:10 am UTC (link)
Great, thank you! You can download your nominee award graphic at the following URL (copy and paste into a new browser window to bypass the hotlink protection): http://www.dotmoon.net/awards/archive/nomhousefalls.jpg

Without an alternate means of contact, I won't be able to send you updates on the awards (I don't want to keep spamming up this entry). Voting for the Best of Fandom round is scheduled to begin March 1st. If you are a winner, I'll contact you again after voting finishes. Feel free to email me anytime if you would like to be on the regular updates list. :)

Thanks again for choosing to participate in the UFO Awards!


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[info]questofdreams
2009-06-09 08:46 pm UTC (link)
HI SOWELL, IT'S STORY TIME (we totally picked an entry at random >_>;; )

*cough*

~Once upon a time, there lived a young boy named Sasuke. He was the son of a nobleman and he was adorable and cheeky and did the whole blushing-while-rocking-on-the-balls-of-his-feet thing because apparently, little boys do that. Trufax.

He had an older brother named Itachi, who was handsome and kind and attentive (to disturbing degrees) and also liked to break into song at periodic intervals and then frolic in flowery meadows with the woodland creatures.

But then one day, Itachi went batshit (Sasuke suspected it was inevitable, what with Itachi thinking he could communicate with squirrels and raccoons) and killed his entire family, except for Sasuke who happened to be missing that day because he was out picking tomatoes for his favorite soup (tomato soup, in case you didn't get that :3).

Fortunately, the Kingdom of Konoha had a great social services department (read: it was manned by two old women and a cat) and they stuck Sasuke with a family who'd requested a child to foster because they were too cheap to buy a housekeeper.

Thus how Sasuke found himself the sole caretaker of a three-story villa in the outskirts of the kingdom and the slave of his so-called foster family.

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[info]silverwyrm
2009-06-09 09:01 pm UTC (link)
Sasuke had two fugly foster brothers, their names were Neji and Gaara. Neji liked to play ballerina a lot and Gaara liked to kick puppies. Thus poor little Sasuke's time was taken up combing Neji's hair and finding different ways to tell him he looked pretty today and digging graves for the animals Gaara killed.

One day an invitation arrived to the foster household. It announced that King and Queen Uzumaki were looking for a bride for their son for Prince Naruto (Because in this story, everyone is gay and women are entirely irrelevant because MPreg totally explains everything.)

Neji and Gaara immediately leaped at the chance to go to the ball. Neji went to the hairdressers and Gaara used puppy feet for earrings.

Sasuke however was not allowed to go, but that was okay, because he planned to use the time everyone was away to escape from the household, go find a long distance relative and live happily ever after in a slightly incestuous relationship.

....But Sasuke liked to talk about his plans out loud so they locked him in the dungeon for safe keeping.

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[info]questofdreams
2009-06-09 09:22 pm UTC (link)
On the morning of the day of the ball, Sasuke awoke to something creeping across his stomach and, believing it to be his foster brothers' piano teacher Orochimaru (who Sasuke had long since suspected had the hots for him on account of how he liked to slap Sasuke's behind and say things like 'hey dollface, want me to tune your piano?' or 'want me to teach you how to press my keys?' or 'look, I can touch my forehead with my tongue!'), he kicked out, hoping to connect his foot with Orochimaru's stomach (or lower, but Sasuke still wasn't entirely sure if Orochimaru was a man or not).

But, upon opening his eyes, there was no one in the small cell with him. In fact, the small weight on his stomach was a mouse. A mouse in a small orange scarf. A mouse in a small orange scarf, which waved and said, "Hi, my name is Konohamaru."

Sasuke knew this day would come. The day he became as crazy as Itachi. So he frowned and said, "Stop making me question my sanity or I'll be making mouse stew for dinner."

But then Konohamaru produced from the folds of his scarf a key (the key to his cell in fact because any old key would be kind of stupid, even for a mouse, and Sasuke had to admit it was useful being batshit). Sasuke took the key with an off-hand 'thanks' and tucked it into his pocket for safe-keeping until his foster family left for the ball.

Every nobleman and noblewoman in Fire Country would be attending the ball and that made searching for any of Sasuke's surviving relatives much easier than having to scour the countryside. He'd have to find a way to attend.

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[info]silverwyrm
2009-06-09 09:37 pm UTC (link)
"Hey wait!"

Sasuke turned back as he was about to leave his dungeon, there were two other mice next to the fat one.

"I'm Moegi :3"

"Okay."

"I think I love you..."

"Yeah. Bye."

Sasuke scrambled to get away from the mice. They might multiply and he really wasn't interested in catching an diseases off them. He suspected he got enough Kabuto, Orochimaru's teaching assistant. He only had to have one conversation with the man and he'd find himself several hours later, entirely naked in a field, with poppies stuck up his ass and no recollection of what had happened.

Sasuke was attempting to get on a horse in order to make his way to the ball. But he'd never had riding lessons, and horses scared him (true story). After landing on horse dung one too many times, Sasuke gave up and started crying.

He was never going to be able to go to the ball and find his next of kin and produced babies with them. He would forever be stuck here doing questionable things that he managed to blank out with the excuse of being batshit.

Then hope arrived from the heavens. Sasuke looked up to find a naked man with an eye patch on the wrong area of his anatomy.

The man smiled at him.

"Hello Sasuke....I am your fairy Godmother \o/"

"...You have a penis."

"Well yes, if I said I was a Godfather then I'd have to get all mafia-d up"

Edited at 2009-06-09 09:38 pm UTC

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[info]questofdreams
2009-06-09 09:55 pm UTC (link)
Sasuke gave him a dubious look, which the man skillfully ignored by twirling on the spot (Sasuke squeezed his eyes shut to avoid being blinded by his sparkly old man bum) and waved his magical wand around in a shower of stardust.

"Now!" he said, and opened up an orange book to page through it. "According to this, you're looking to catch yourself a prince by attending the ball. Easy peasy, I don't know why I'm needed for this." He gave Sasuke a once over (Sasuke's shirt was in rags and his pants were so worn thin that bending over would probably split it in two). "Yeah, you look ready for the ball to me. The 'bodice ripper/lowly peasant' look is very in this season."

Sasuke crossed his arms, expression darkening. "I don't want a prince. I hear Prince Naruto is an imbecile anyway. I just want to find any long lost relatives I might have."

"Right, you want to have glowing blond man babies in the name of England, I mean, Konoha. Gotcha." He waved his wand again and Sasuke's rags were replaced by a pinstripe suit and a fedora. "Eh. Not exactly what I was going for but that works."

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[info]silverwyrm
2009-06-09 10:06 pm UTC (link)
"...I'm not going to marry the prince."

"Of course you are! What kind of Negative Thinking is that?!" Kakashi gave Sasuke another once over, "Tilt that hat to the side, just a tad, gotta pimp you out, baby!"

"...Are you high?"

"No, I'm a mass murdering ninja with severe trauma issues."

"Right."

"Now to get you a ride..."

Sasuke watched horrified as his fairy godmother twirled his wand and attempted to transform the horse into a car. Except his aim missed and he turned the horse dung into a double decker English bus.

"That'll do!"

Sasuke was ushered into the bus and found that Konohamaru in the driver's seat with Moegi and the other mouse (who possibly had swine flu) at the pedals.

"...I'm not sure how comfortable I am with this."

"Nonsense, my ~lover~ Iruka loves having sex on a bus, it's the perfect first date vechile. Chop chop, Prince Naruto's dick is yearning for your bum."

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[info]questofdreams
2009-06-17 04:04 am UTC (link)
"I'm pretty sure they don't license mice to drive..." Sasuke wasn't society savvy but he also wasn't an idiot.

"Of course not, but I assure you, you are in capable hands." Kakashi waved his wand again and the seats at the back of the bus turned into a disco ball and revolving bed complete with heart shaped pillows.

Sasuke despaired.

Still, barring the remark about appendages being inserted into questionable places, Sasuke WAS getting a free ride to the ball.

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